- Izu MomochiChunin
- Stat Page : Needle Queen Page
Mission Record : mission log
Village : Kirigakure
Ryo : 10000
Senbon sword
Wed Jul 19, 2023 4:39 am
Name: Senbon Sword
Appearance:
The senbon sword is 5ft in length, and 1/2 inch wide. It is made of solide flexible steel as to not break by its thinness, like an oversized senbon with a loop in the opposite end small enough to slip a wire through it.
Backstory: forged to imitate the look and style of one ofthe legendary sword of the mist, Nuibari, this needle sword is a staple of Kirigakure ninja of old. Now rarely seen, it is a weapon who need a lot of practice to be used, both in melee and when throwing it. The main difference is that this needle sword doesnt include a wire, but can include one to combien wire techniques with sword techniques using both weapon as one. This special weapon was developped for the Anbu of the old kirigakure, as a reliable and deadly weapon meant to pierce its targets and make the wielder able to retrieve the weapon on the other side of his target, giving more maneuverability and chance to impact intern organs.
Ryo Value: 5000 ryo
Type: Sharp
Health: 100
Trait: Piercing: whenever an attack is made with this weapon and hits the target, may it be in melee or in range, the sword is so thin that it can pierce the whole target and always come back on the other side, being able to be retrieved by the user on the other side. As mentionned, this weapon can also be combined with the wire to dew target and make the wire go trough targets, as a mean to use the wire more efficiently.
Bonus Requirements: exclusive to Izu momochi and the one she autorizes, Kirigakure exclusive
Appearance:
The senbon sword is 5ft in length, and 1/2 inch wide. It is made of solide flexible steel as to not break by its thinness, like an oversized senbon with a loop in the opposite end small enough to slip a wire through it.
Backstory: forged to imitate the look and style of one ofthe legendary sword of the mist, Nuibari, this needle sword is a staple of Kirigakure ninja of old. Now rarely seen, it is a weapon who need a lot of practice to be used, both in melee and when throwing it. The main difference is that this needle sword doesnt include a wire, but can include one to combien wire techniques with sword techniques using both weapon as one. This special weapon was developped for the Anbu of the old kirigakure, as a reliable and deadly weapon meant to pierce its targets and make the wielder able to retrieve the weapon on the other side of his target, giving more maneuverability and chance to impact intern organs.
Ryo Value: 5000 ryo
Type: Sharp
Health: 100
Trait: Piercing: whenever an attack is made with this weapon and hits the target, may it be in melee or in range, the sword is so thin that it can pierce the whole target and always come back on the other side, being able to be retrieved by the user on the other side. As mentionned, this weapon can also be combined with the wire to dew target and make the wire go trough targets, as a mean to use the wire more efficiently.
Bonus Requirements: exclusive to Izu momochi and the one she autorizes, Kirigakure exclusive
- Hiroki ShimadaChunin
- Stat Page : Mementos of Noon - Hiroki Shimada
Mission Record : Hiroki's Mission Log
Living Clones : Mementos of Dawn - Hiro Shimada
Mementos of Dusk - Ki Shimada
Familiar : Shichiro
Clan Focus : Ninjutsu
Village : Kumogakure
Ryo : 150580
Re: Senbon sword
Fri Jul 28, 2023 9:30 pm
Heyo, so a few things which need to be edited
Up first is the name, this can be a synonym of the word needle, but Needle itself is something that would most likely be apped eventually.
Next; remove that it can be thrown by type; this is something that can simply be implied.
Lastly; it's effect. This is the only main issue, the trait itself is too similar to what's presented by Meteoric Iron, so just app a new trait entirely and the weapon can be augmented with Meteoric Iron later down the line.
Up first is the name, this can be a synonym of the word needle, but Needle itself is something that would most likely be apped eventually.
Next; remove that it can be thrown by type; this is something that can simply be implied.
Lastly; it's effect. This is the only main issue, the trait itself is too similar to what's presented by Meteoric Iron, so just app a new trait entirely and the weapon can be augmented with Meteoric Iron later down the line.
- Izu MomochiChunin
- Stat Page : Needle Queen Page
Mission Record : mission log
Village : Kirigakure
Ryo : 10000
Re: Senbon sword
Sun Jul 30, 2023 7:48 pm
removing the thrown in the type : no problem !
im not sure what you mean by the name thing ! do i need to change it to not include the word needle ? like i could call it ''senbon Sword''
lastly, for the trait, i actually based it on this weapon that have a returning trait too (link) and that was approved ! i basically wanted a version of the same weapon, but as sharp and that i could throw !
im not sure what you mean by the name thing ! do i need to change it to not include the word needle ? like i could call it ''senbon Sword''
lastly, for the trait, i actually based it on this weapon that have a returning trait too (link) and that was approved ! i basically wanted a version of the same weapon, but as sharp and that i could throw !
- Izu MomochiChunin
- Stat Page : Needle Queen Page
Mission Record : mission log
Village : Kirigakure
Ryo : 10000
Re: Senbon sword
Sun Jul 30, 2023 8:05 pm
edited again with the requested edits and a new trait!
- Hiroki ShimadaChunin
- Stat Page : Mementos of Noon - Hiroki Shimada
Mission Record : Hiroki's Mission Log
Living Clones : Mementos of Dawn - Hiro Shimada
Mementos of Dusk - Ki Shimada
Familiar : Shichiro
Clan Focus : Ninjutsu
Village : Kumogakure
Ryo : 150580
Re: Senbon sword
Thu Aug 03, 2023 9:45 am
Approved
- AluMissing-Nin (D-rank)
- Stat Page : Stat Page
Mission Record : [url=linktoapp]Log[/url]
Clan Focus : N/A
Village : Missing Ninja
Ryo : 500
Re: Senbon sword
Fri Aug 25, 2023 5:17 pm
Pulled to for edits requested by Creator
- AluMissing-Nin (D-rank)
- Stat Page : Stat Page
Mission Record : [url=linktoapp]Log[/url]
Clan Focus : N/A
Village : Missing Ninja
Ryo : 500
Re: Senbon sword
Tue Aug 29, 2023 11:25 am
Reapproved
Edits made: Originally wasn't char exclusive is now char exclusive
Edits made: Originally wasn't char exclusive is now char exclusive
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