Training (NO KILL Prim/Kochou/Vreytel)

She was holding back back this whole time, and Vretyel, always wanting to fight people at their best, was disappointed at Primrose.
Although he was not pleased with Primrose, Navi mentioned that if Vretyel wanted to become Genin, he would still have a lot of learn, he realized then that he now had to amplify his training, starting right now.

He wanted to know the extent of Primroses power, not just the lazy side of her. Vretyel knew then that this fight was to do Justice not only to himself by winning the spar, but to show everyone that even at her full strength I can still beat her.

As Navi was talking to Primrose, Vretyel casually stepped back foot by foot. When he felt he was far enough away, when Navi Finished talking, Vretyel spoke with a composed and respectable tone.
"No, In a real battle if she was holding back then that was her decision, just because you came down from observing us doesn't mean she gets a free attack, or time to recover. If you are holding back Primrose then its your fault this time, this is your last chance, I won't stop until one of us is down for the count, now show me what you can do!"

At that moment Vretyel began the same assault he used against her last time. He knew that it would be different now, he was several meters further back then what he was last time, and he was getting tired. But again he focused his remaining chakra to his feet, making him run faster towards the left of where primrose was standing. Then right as he was about to pass her Vretyel turned right and began charging towards her, aiming a left roundhouse kick to her left upper thigh, potentially making her fall on the ground. Though he was farther away this time, Vretyel knew that Primrose would be able conjure up a counterattack in time, which would hopefully show Vretyel the extent of Primroses power.

[The order now is Kochou, Primrose, Navi, Vretyel]

Kochou screamed when she heard Navis voice boom the word "Enough!" When he walked over to them she stared up at him. After hearing him speak to Prim and Vretyel, Kochou ran over to him. wanting to get his attention she tugged on his sleeve. "Is this such a good idea? Prims already down and shes apparently in pain! Isn't this kind of cruel?" Kochou said standing by him where it was safe.

Primmy nearly jumped out of her skin until she saw Navi. When he spoke to her she just looked at him kind of dazed, "Sorry Navi sensei.". She knew as far as training went, no special treatment for her and they would not let their relationship get in the way of training. She respected Navis authority and was slightly embarrassed considering he had trained her and she was more experienced than these other two, yet she was the one down getting her butt kicked. When she heard Vretyel yell at her, she covered her eyes with her hands and said,"Oh Fuck me... what the hell did I do now." When he was given the okay to come at her, She moved to her feet quickly despite the severe pain in her head. "Damn it, is it not apparent that I have a headache!" she growled at Vretyel. More out of anger and frustration at herself than anything.

(Primmy does use some foul language when she is upset, fair warning, she is your average teenage kid)

[Next time you're trying to dodge an attack, be a little more specific. "She moved to her feet quickly despite the severe pain in her head." Isn't exactly a dodge, but Ill let it slide here. Say your running out of the way of the attack specifically, or ducking or blocking or something.

After you do that, you should also try to attack, otherwise everytime it comes his turn, he gets to attack you again because all you've done this post is run. Just a tip]

Navi crossed his arms and watched, waiting for the results of the fight to unfold.

After Primrose just dodged Vretyels attack by running from the kick, Vretyel started running in the same direction as Primrose. Since he was faster than her because of his faster speed, Vretyel's increased speed because of chakra still concentrated in his feet, it would only be a meter or two at most for him to catch up to Primrose. When he was close enough to Primrose Vretyel decided to increase Primroses Disorientation. He concentrated some of his chakra to his hands and aimed for a closed palm hook with each of his hands to each of Primroses ears. Since she was running away from Vretyel even if she looked back she would only have time see and block one of hooks in time, and if she tried to dodge by ducking Vretyel would have the speed advantage over her and just re aim his hooks.

Kochou stared at the situation wide eyed and continued standing next to Navi. She covered her eyes, she couldn't watch. Kochou was actually a little scared considering Prim was getting very agitated and Vretyel was getting stronger! "Is this really such a good idea?" kochou looked up at Navi and asked.

Primmys headache was beginning to disappear leaving her slightly angry. At this point Primmy just wanted to end this spar but she knew she had been holding back because hurting kids was not her thing. Not anymore, now that she saw what this kid was capable of she knew defending herself came first. She had literally a split second to defend and counterattack this kid. Vretyel wasn't a bad fighter, could hold his own in a battle if he needed to. She decided to attempt to block the attack and attempt to kick him in the knee.

["He concentrated some of his chakra to his hands and aimed for a closed palm hook with each of his hands to each of Primroses ears. "

^this paints a clear picture, he is aiming a hook on each side of Prim's head to her ears.
He also goes on to describe the attack and possible effects bla bla bla

"She decided to attempt to block the attack"
You need to describe how to block it. "At the last second Prim rose both of her arms to stop the incoming hooks," or "Prim jumped back narrowly as the hooks came in, as she didn't feel she could block and mount a counterattack".

Just saying "I block" isn't really good fighting. "I USE MY AWESOME FLAME BOMB". "I BLOCK!"
instead the defender would do something like: "Joe the ninja used his large speed advantage, sprinting backwards and jumping out of the way of the ferocious attack, landing a good 20 meters fromt he origin of the explosion."

Also, you don't need to "attempt" to block attacks. You may block and dodge any attacks as long as your character is good enough or in a position to do it. You only need to put attempt
in something like "attempt to kick him in the knee." Defensive: not needed, Offensive: needed.

Try to be more descriptive about the action. Example: "Prim rose her left leg and aimed a powerful attack at Vretyel's left knee, attempting to slam her foot against his leg and immobilize him"

Sorry I'm being really long, but im just trying to answer any possible questions you might have before you ask them.]

Navi ignored Kochou as he watched the fight unfold, "Ninja are meant to fight, if they can't fight, they will be slaughtered by our enemies. Yes, training and getting stronger is a good idea." Prim had held her arms up to block the attack and aimed a weak kick and Vretyel's knee (I'm saying you did that for now, next time be more descriptive in your post). The fight would most likely be over soon if they were just relying on hand to hand combat.

Vretyel knew that something like this would happen, that she would try and succeed in blocking the incoming attack, he did not expect however, that she would be able to turn around in time to block the attack. She was also able to do a kick with her left leg. Vretyel also knew that he was running low on chakra, although he knew how to concentrate chakra, he is still a student and sometimes he would use to much, wasting the chakra, he knew he had only a few minutes left before he couldn't use it anymore.

When Primrose had blocked the Vretyels attack, Vretyel knew that she would have to keep her hands there so Vretyel could hit her ears. Using this block to his advantage it would be easy for Vretyel to grab onto Primrose's arms still at that blocking point.

The kick that Primrose used on Vretyel was weak, it looked weak, and Vretyel knew that if it did hit, it wouldn't do much. So he allowed for her left leg kick to hit his left knee. It was true that the kick did hurt a little bit, but nothing Vretyl could not handle, he would still be able to balance on one leg. At the moment when the kick hit, when she was balancing on one leg, Vretyel pulled his hands down to his sides while still grabbing Primroses arms. Since she was balanced on one leg and with his hands still being powered by chakra he would be able to pull them down. Since her hands and arms were pulled forward to Vretyels sides with such speed and force, it would mean that Primrose would lose balance and and start falling towards Vretyel. Then with his right knee Vretyel aimed a knee towards Primrose's falling chin. Since her kick did little damage to his left leg, Vretyel was still able to balance himself. Even if her left leg landed on the ground she would still be falling forward into Vretyel's knee.

Kochou knew Navi had a point. Kochou also figured since it was a free for all, why not join in. Instinct told her it would be wrong to join in, but she wasn't one to be left out. She decided to defend Prim and aim to kick the back of Vretyels knee. The way he was postioned in front of Primrose it shouldn't be hard to kick him in the back of his knee that had already been hit in the front by Primrose. Even Kochou could tell Prim was low on chakra. "Sorry I have to do this."Kochou told Navi as she ran up behind Vretyel and aimed to kick him in the same knee Prim had already hit from the front.

(Was my wording better this time?)